Saturday, June 2, 2018

REQUIEM (Originally Posted 11/14/2009)

People always assume my stories and poems are about me. Well, they usually aren't.

This one was.


I thought I'd post a little poem I wrote about a lost love. I can be brief when I want to be!

REQUIEM

Her name evoked sweetness, exotic delight,
Our love against logic was found.
We burned like a skyrocket, lighting the night,
Till we sputtered and crashed to the ground.

It didn't end badly, yet didn't end well.
She's a part of me still. This I own.
And I fight being thrust toward my personal Hell,
As I sleep with a ghost, all alone.

And thanks for your time.

18 comments:

  1. Hmm I may need to dig through some poems, but yes I wrote one about sleeping with a ghost alone!

    Love can be lonely!

    I question why does a love slip silently into the night?

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    1. Yes, love can be lonely, love can "slip silently into the night," and -- oh, hell -- love can SUCK!!!

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    2. Ha Well said! Why does this song come to mind?

      Live stinks, yeah yeah
      (Love sinks)
      Love stinks, yeah yeah

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    3. (Love stinks) well It could sink as well haha

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    4. I'm not a big Adam Sandler fan, but I did happen to see The Wedding Singer, and when he played "Love Stinks" at someone's wedding, I recognized the song from the first few chords and laughed like hell.

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    5. I read somewhere Peter Wolf wrote this song after his marriage broke up. I don’t remember the details, The song was a huge success for the J Geils Band.

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    6. Yeah, I remember it well. I bought the LP when it came out.

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  2. Poignant and intriguing. 'It didn't end badly, yet didn't end well.' Brilliant, poetically. Also the fact that the entire trajectory of the relationship and aftermath is told in just two quatrains - yum!

    Why do I feel I know this poem? I can't explain that - but I also feel I know the lady concerned read it and gave you her opinion on it years after it was written?...I probably sound crazy!

    You should write more poetry/song lyrics.

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    1. Wow. This is incredibly embarrassing. I just found out that I had already re-posted this poem from 2009, just a few months ago, in January! And I totally forgot I'd did that! No wonder it seemed familiar to you, Nila!

      The woman I wrote this poem about did indeed see it, but her reply seemed to totally miss that it was about her, in spite of two biiiig clues!

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    2. So relieved to know, phew! - not completely crazy yet :) :)

      It's powerful enough to have remained in memory. Proves my point - you should write more poetry.

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    3. I'm currently working on "new" lyrics for the song "Sara," which Bob Dylan wrote for his first wife. I'm writing it for a young lady named Sarah (with an H at the end, unlike Sara Dylan).

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  3. Stuck between ending badly and ending no so well, can be one of the worst. At least if it ended badly you can swear them off and be on your way haha

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    1. I do think of her now and then. She seems to have disappeared from the internet.

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    1. I could, yes, but you don't know her or of her, so her name wouldn't mean anything to you. This went down in 2009, about two years before we started visiting each other's blogs.

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    2. I suppose her name was Jennifer.

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    3. Ha! No, but that's a damned good guess, considering how many Jennifers I've known and (in some cases) dated.

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