tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post8065551580187133883..comments2024-03-02T07:47:01.546-05:00Comments on The Lair of the Silver Fox.: "For Baby (For Bobbie)" -- Part One, 1974The Silver Foxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00730805376957629641noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-80458140643625721302011-06-28T02:01:49.729-04:002011-06-28T02:01:49.729-04:00All of that for a John Denver concert? What happen...All of that for a John Denver concert? What happened? Was Zeppelin all booked up while you were writing this? hahahahahaKeairhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01045901094474739947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-42903709145374031132009-05-17T09:03:00.000-04:002009-05-17T09:03:00.000-04:00I always did hate to be the "new kid" in school! N...I always did hate to be the "new kid" in school! Never-mind some of the cruel nick-names. Interesting, so far...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-50811924025417717732009-05-13T22:09:00.000-04:002009-05-13T22:09:00.000-04:00MUCH better! Now I have a clear image in my head ...MUCH better! Now I have a clear image in my head of Karen. You may proceed. <br /><br />Again, really liked this first installment and look forward to reading more. Thanks also for your compliment on my blog.blunozhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02917109513028096262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-552500093565939992009-05-13T14:41:00.000-04:002009-05-13T14:41:00.000-04:00"I anticipate your posts being a little longer tha..."I anticipate your posts being a little longer than average and needing some time for reading..."<br /><br /><I>My</I> posts? Longer? Really?<br /><br />*<I>sigh</I>* Guilty as charged...<br /><br />Seriously, that's a valid point you made, about Karen's description (or lack of it). I just transplanted and slightly re-worked a section from Part Two. I inserted it during the scene toward the end of Part One, where Eli drives Karen home from school. (You'll probably notice I use my usual "cheat" of comparing Karen to a celebrity.)<br /><br />Now, that ought to screw up everyone who's already read Part One but <I>doesn't</I> see this comment...<br /><br />Anyway, thanks for the constructive input! Glad you've liked it so far.The Silver Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00730805376957629641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-72442715054815755152009-05-13T13:25:00.000-04:002009-05-13T13:25:00.000-04:00David, again, I'm slow on the uptake. Part of the...David, again, I'm slow on the uptake. Part of the problem is I anticipate your posts being a little longer than average and needing some time for reading, so I hold them in my queue until I have the time to sit and read.<br /><br />In any case, I thought this was a magnificent introduction and I very much look forward to reading the rest of the story. One MINOR point of feedback - in my mind, I feel like I have a clear image of who Eli and Teddy are, but not really of who Karen is. You described her as a dark-haired sophomore and she's a foot shorter than Eli and Teddy. From the Boris Karloff reference, I thought maybe she was fugly like Frankenstein's monster, but then you also described her as attractive. Sorry, I'm just confused on what image I should have in my mind for Karen.<br /><br />Even so, I really enjoyed the banter between the two characters and look forward to reading more.blunozhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02917109513028096262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-9825038937225178802009-05-11T17:27:00.000-04:002009-05-11T17:27:00.000-04:00Sparkle: Hm. Somewhere in that list, you must be r...Sparkle: Hm. Somewhere in that list, you must be right -- or close -- once or twice...The Silver Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00730805376957629641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-76904586116181012852009-05-11T14:57:00.000-04:002009-05-11T14:57:00.000-04:00Off to a promising start!
Hmm...maybe you wrote ...Off to a promising start! <br /><br />Hmm...maybe you wrote this in response to writing prompts from Cakie or with stuff from Cakie's blog (Bobby, concert tickets, Beatles, 1974, walking into a wall) and/or Cakie is kinda Karen! Naw? Aw, well. Search me! But, I am enjoying the story--right on/write on!Sparkle Plentyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05580457285524512613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-23797269400572132632009-05-11T12:49:00.000-04:002009-05-11T12:49:00.000-04:00Cake: Very glad that you're liking it. (I'm still ...Cake: <I>Very</I> glad that <I>you're</I> liking it. (I'm still debating whether or not I'll tell people what inspired this twisted little tale.) Chapter Two is written and will be posted next Monday. Chapters Three and Four -- I'm gonna try my darnedest to have this stop at four -- will show up on the following consecutive Mondays.<br /><br />Valerie: "Banter" is my strong point. if I may say so. For examples, read "Angelina," "Meet Mark," or any other multi-part stories in my archives, and I myself recommend "My Island," my lonnnnng, <I>true</I> story, accessible by clicking on the link just a few inches below my Silver Fox profile photo. It's probably the best thing I've ever written... and this is coming from someone who describes himself as "my own worst critic."<br /><br />Everyone Else: All comments are greatly appreciated!The Silver Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00730805376957629641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-35323838796584552512009-05-11T11:49:00.000-04:002009-05-11T11:49:00.000-04:00Excellent. When's the next chapter?
(I'm greedy ...Excellent. When's the next chapter?<br /><br />(I'm greedy and impatient, yes?)Cakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12547737277654390439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-15802367041349166332009-05-11T08:20:00.000-04:002009-05-11T08:20:00.000-04:00Cool,this is really cool.Cool,this is really cool.Candiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09820349874923006162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-82415974354420368662009-05-11T06:36:00.000-04:002009-05-11T06:36:00.000-04:00i suddenly find myself in high school...nice play ...i suddenly find myself in high school...nice play fox.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-940279622388933472009-05-11T06:19:00.000-04:002009-05-11T06:19:00.000-04:00You resurrected part of my youth I prefer to forge...You resurrected part of my youth I prefer to forget ... youthful banter and all. Good first part of what promises to be an interesting tale.Valeriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12099030819314552958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-18722790824669011752009-05-11T02:52:00.000-04:002009-05-11T02:52:00.000-04:00And why did she slam herself into the wall, I wond...And why did she slam herself into the wall, I wonder? And just what is so last-chance town about those Denver tickets? Hmmmm....Meganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09387041422819664987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188724087075739853.post-34866576818442062922009-05-11T01:20:00.000-04:002009-05-11T01:20:00.000-04:00This is good Mr. Fox. Can't wait for part two. Joh...This is good Mr. Fox. Can't wait for part two. John Denver...that was back in the day.Ronda Laveenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03902846545309643023noreply@blogger.com